
she wanted me to learn how to read nad right but i saw that we need money in the house so i went to wor. after papa had died i had to take resonciabilities. i was 16 when i stared to work. boy was i happy when i received thosed full 75 cents. mama was real prode of me when i gave her those 50 sents wiht that she could buy little Eddy his colar shirt for his elementry graduation.
i was so prode boy little Eddy new how to read and write and do math boy would papa be prode of him. now he's off in the farm taking care of mama with his wife Catty. i now wored in a factory making railroad for old Mr.Carnegie. he was a staburn boss he won't listen to us, but he neec money and he did have good paying jobs. i have saved up for a painting that i loved for my house.
"Mary, Mary come see what i baught for the house."
"Now what Kenny. did you go off soending that money, i tod you not to go buy that fancy painting i don't anterstand the meaning of the painting."
I liked the story its a good story smooth beggining nice ending you did however have a few spelling errors.
ReplyDeletegood story. you used the same words that they used back then, i liked that. the only thing you need to do is smell check.
ReplyDeleteGOOD STORY!
ReplyDelete-except theres a lot of mispelled words....
-SMILEY BABEY
good story i liked how you tried to make it seem like they were people from the old days for real by writing how they talked back them keep it up gurlll!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeletegood story.
ReplyDeletejust check the spelling.
keep up the good work!
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Good story Nancy you just need to spell check. :)
ReplyDeleteCoo story you actually write it how they used to talk back then, and well i agree with the rest work on the spelling
ReplyDeleteYUp YUp YUp. LOl ITSz A VERy NiiCE STORy BUt YEw NEEd SOMe SPElL CHECk [=
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